I think it lacks the focus that a haiku needs. It represents more than one idea or image, so it's too much subject matter for a haiku.
On another note, haikus don't have to be strictly 5-7-5. that only applies to the japanese characters. Translated to english the rule need not be so strict.
I think it lacks the focus that a haiku needs. It represents more than one idea or image, so it's too much subject matter for a haiku.
ReplyDeleteOn another note, haikus don't have to be strictly 5-7-5. that only applies to the japanese characters. Translated to english the rule need not be so strict.
:D I like this one! Never mind what a haiku -should- be, this one carries enough meaning for me already.
ReplyDeletei like it, maycontainpeanuts! ^^
ReplyDeleteone idea? you mean like
minus b plus minus
root b squared minus four a c
over two a equals x
?
WTF Cheng you are one sickk poet XD
ReplyDeletewell, not really. go read a few.
ReplyDeletethis isn't my own... but i think it's quite good:
ReplyDeleteThree things are certain
Death, taxes and lost data
Guess which has occurred