Wednesday, September 14, 2005

Cherry blossoms fall;
Carried off upon the wind,
Borne by whims of fate.
-~-
Walking by the road,
When a car passes by me;
A roar, then nothing.
-~-
Rivers swell their banks
As the ice begins to melt
As the sun will rise.

3 comments:

a adhiyatma said...

Woot haikux0rz. Thank you.
I don't like the first one. A haiku is too short to carry a metaphor or any traditional western symbolism.

Second one is good. Refine the second line, i don't think the first word is necessary. Otherwise I think it's pretty decent.

Anonymous said...

Sweet! "A car passes by me" is a little strange though, it just somehow doesn't flow.

Cheers,
bern

Derrick said...

The theme was the transience of life; you can read each haiku individually, or take the three together. Even the shape of the poem is supposed to convey that XD

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